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A happy day

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杨咏琪 发表于 2016-7-11 22:50:53 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
本帖最后由 杨咏琪 于 2016-7-13 20:05 编辑


A happy day

Today is fine. I went to the arboretum with my sister.
The weather is so hot . As a matter of fact, we are all lazy ,but my sister would like me to learn about more rare plants . She thought to understand these plants has many benefits for me. Under the strong sunlight ,we stick to going to the arboretum. There are many strange plants . I am so happy that I jump up.Enduring the burning sun we walked more than two hours. Although tired, I am happy and satisfied.
   I want to thank my sister for accompanying me in the hot summer stroll botanical garden.What a happy and meaningful day





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zhctrue 发表于 2016-7-13 14:34:13 | 显示全部楼层
1. learn about more rare plant . --> plant改为plants,plant为可数名词,所以要么前面加上限定词,要么变成复数,不能只用单数形式;
2. to understand these plants have many benefits --> have改成has,主语是整个不定式,属于单数概念;
3. so happy and jumping up. -->改成so happy that I jump up,构成so .. that句型;
4. Endure the burning sun we walked --> endure改为enduring,现在分词作状语;
5. Thank my sister to accompany me -->改为I want to thank my sister for accompanying me,采用thank somebody for doing something结构;
6. in the hot summer stroll botanical garden.结构可能有点乱。
此外,时态有些不一致,有些地方可能需要用过去时。
Best wishes to you! Have a nice day!
 楼主| 杨咏琪 发表于 2016-7-13 15:08:26 | 显示全部楼层
zhctrue 发表于 2016-7-13 14:34
1. learn about more rare plant . --> plant改为plants,plant为可数名词,所以要么前面加上限定词,要么 ...

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