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求大佬帮忙分析作文!!尤其是文章相关度!拜谢!

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438446357 发表于 2017-3-20 20:57:36 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
本帖最后由 438446357 于 2017-3-20 20:59 编辑

作文在85到90分段徘徊了很久,相关度一直提不上去。之前看见有大神推荐GRE长难句阅读教程,仔细阅读几天,在句子上略有体会(虽然和大神相比微不足道),但是相关度还是提不上。。。求大神帮忙看一篇拙作。。。这篇是86.5的15年12月第三种六级作文。。下附:(害羞捂脸)

Currently, since the computers are increasingly prevalent, there is no doubt that what we search for on the internet is becoming numerous and ample, while the quanlity of the information is difficult to distinguish, which triggers to the harm caused by misleading information.
As for children and the aged, whose capacity is limited by their ages, the misleading information will probably lead them to form some unhealthy habits and misunderstand something on the course of their exploration to the world, which results in unnecessary conflicts. As for the people who searching imperative information, the misleading information is not only just a waste of time but a danger to some extent that on the account for horrible disasters of a family or one person due to erroneous actions they did as well. For instance, there served as a wake-ucall for us that a college student called Wei Zexi unfortunately died since he adopted a premature operating method in the hospital without a licence that had searched for on the internet.
In a word, what we should so primarily is to distinguish the information on the internet and seek professional advice when necessary rather than assert what searched by the internet is true.





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